Brevitas # 2

(Timed 15 minutes. The picture is “Hot Date” by Matt Waggle)

It was lovely, the way she burned. She lent a warmth to the walls and the windows and blended with the tablecloth he had bought from Vienna. The smoke curled in rings, like opium burning in the Orient.

He took another sip of wine.  1964; it had been a good year for sauvignon blanc. He was a man of exquisite taste, particularly with his women. He liked those with fire in them, whose eyes flashed, “No man can have me.” Separating true firebrands from imposters was like inspecting tanzanite, but he was well-skilled. He charmed them by provocation, making them feel loathing and fascination for him, until they could bear both his presence and absence no longer. And he was a handsome man, was he not? A connoisseur who excited the delicacies presented to him, making them want to be eaten.

He emptied his glass and leaned back, marveling at the colors before him. The clock chimed ten times and woke him from his thoughts. It was still early, and there were still many more women he could charm. The scent of burning oil stimulated him, sharpened his senses. He put his glass down and gave a last look at…her name had been Maria, hadn’t it? Then he started looking for his hat.


Posted on March 22, 2007, in Brevitas, Writing. Bookmark the permalink. 5 Comments.

  1. Excellent effort again. 🙂 Though can I guess some experience with romance books came in handy here? 😉

  2. i really enjoy these writing exercises you make. ^___________^

    make more. hehehehe

  3. LOL @ Banzai Cat. Actually the last romance book I read was nearly 7 years ago, and it was a dare, hahahaha.

    Hey kristine! Thanks, glad you enjoyed them! And I will make more, no fear, hehe. It’s good practice.

  4. wow, Im flattered you chose this to write about. The writing is great too. Motivates me to re-do this older piece. Thanks!

    I always thought the guy could be more hopelessly compelled to kill, though in the illustration he does seem non-chalant, and you’ve shown that in your writing. Keep it up 🙂


  5. Hi Matt. Can’t imagine how you would have found my post (I’m rather flattered as well, haha), but that’s the internet for ya – brings stuff to full circle. Thanks for the comments, and thanks for doing that piece in the first place!

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